TIPOIC SENTENCE:
I THINK ,IF YOU WORK HARD AND SAVE MONEY FOR YOUR GOALS THEN YOU BECOME IN A SUCCESSFUL PERSON.
YOU SHOULD GET YOUR FINANCES IN ORDER BECOUSE YOU LIVE PAYCHECK TO PAYCHECK ALL THE TIME.
FOR EXAMPLE:
MY FRIEND JHON ,WHO IS MANAGER ,HAS ALOT OF CREDIT CARDS AND HE LIVES PAYCHECK TO PAYCHECK.
YOU SHOULDN´T SPEND YOUR MONEY FOR USELESS THINGS BECOUSE YOU WILL NEED THIS MONEY FOR SOMETHINGS VERY IMPORTANTS FOR EXAMPLE : CLOTHES , FOOD ,ETC
FOR EXAMPLE:
MY BEST FRIEND CRISTIAN, WHO SPEND HIS MONEY IN KARAOKE BARS EVERY SATURDAY THEN ON SUNDAY HE TOLD ME : ERICK LEND TO ME 80 SOLES FOR MY FOOD PLEASE...
BEFORE THAT , SOME PEOPLE BECOME MILLIONARIES ,THEY WORKED HARD AND STUDIED HARD BECOUSE THEY THOUGHT TO BE PROFESSIONALS IN THE FUTURE THEN THEY STARTED TO SAVE MONEY AND THEY PUT THEIR MONEY IN THE STOCK MARKET FOR EXAMPLE:
I KNOW TWO BROTHERS,THEY FROM CUZCO. THEY STARTED TO SELL TOMATOES IN THE STREET THEN THEY BOUGHT A NEW CAR , THEN, THEY CONTINUED TO WORK HARD BECOUSE THEY THINK TO HAVE THEIR COMPANY OF TAXIS . NOW THEY HAVE THEIR OWN COMPANY , THEY HAVE A BIG HO IN LARCO AND THEY HELP POOR PEOPLE.
BY ERICK VILLEGAS
INTERMEDIATE 07
GROUP #4
TIPOIC (the correct word is topic)SENTENCE:
ResponderEliminarYOU SHOULD GET YOUR FINANCES IN ORDER BECOUSE(because) YOU LIVE PAYCHECK TO PAYCHECK ALL THE TIME.
FOR EXAMPLE:
MY FRIEND JHON ,WHO IS (maybe you can use an "a")MANAGER ,HAS ALOT OF CREDIT CARDS AND HE LIVES PAYCHECK TO PAYCHECK.
YOU SHOULDN´T SPEND YOUR MONEY FOR USELESS THINGS BECOUSE(because) YOU WILL NEED THIS MONEY FOR SOMETHINGS VERY IMPORTANTS(you need a point here.) FOR EXAMPLE : CLOTHES , FOOD ,ETC
(maybe you can write another example instead for example)
FOR EXAMPLE:
BEFORE THAT , SOME PEOPLE BECOME MILLIONARIES ,THEY WORKED HARD AND STUDIED HARD BECOUSE(because) THEY THOUGHT TO BE PROFESSIONALS IN THE FUTURE THEN THEY STARTED TO SAVE MONEY AND THEY ( instead put, it's better if you write invest their money...) PUT THEIR MONEY IN THE -an- STOCK MARKET FOR EXAMPLE:
I KNOW (meet) TWO BROTHERS,THEY -are- FROM CUZCO. THEY STARTED TO SELL TOMATOES IN THE STREET THEN THEY BOUGHT A NEW CAR , THEN, THEY CONTINUED TO WORK HARD BECOUSE (because)THEY THINK(want) TO HAVE THEIR -own- COMPANY OF TAXIS . NOW THEY HAVE THEIR OWN COMPANY , THEY HAVE A BIG HO( what's ho?) IN LARCO AND THEY HELP POOR PEOPLE.
your ideas are good! you have to be careful when you write some words like because!. i use this "-" to introduce some words that i think that you forgot them and "(" to correct mistakes.
bye!
luz rojas