Money isn´t everything
People believe that money is the best, however many rich people are unhappy, therefor, money is not everything in our lives. People should not forget that feelings and friendship are more important, obviously we need money, that´s why we have to create a balance between money and feelings.
For example, I could have money and everything I want, but it would be very sad if I don´t have anyone to share my money with.
Actually people work hard to get money because they think that money is the most important and necesary, however they´re wrong because there are things most important such as love, health and our family.
So in the world there are too many poor people, but no all of them are suffering people, those who understand that the love they have in their family and friends.
Furthermore, when you have money everybody wanna be your friend, but when you don´t have it sometimes people don´t give you importance and in some cases some people have several money, however they don´t have culture.
Nowdays;we know that money has become so important in our lives, that many people try to get it by murdering, stealing or any kind of bad things in our society that´s why sometimes we are so interested in getting money that in some cases we don´t care about what we do for getting it.
By Angela Izaguirre Villanueva.
Group 4
Intermediate 07
1 comentario:
Well your writting is great but you have 3 mistakes two of them are sentence fragment(SF), for example in the second paragraf you're telling an example but you have to use "they" because you're talking about people. An other mistake is in the fifth paragraf because you didn't write a writting for a specific person in others words is in general so use people. And the last mistake is wrong word(WW) in the fourth paragraf, it isn't no all of them it's not all of them.
Cesar Huachin ^^,
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